一、句子之间缺少过渡性的单词或词组
① salmons swim upstream, they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
② salmons swim upstream, and then they leap over huge dams to reach their destination.
二、省字号(')的滥用
① the government's plan
② the plan of the government
三、代词之间的性、数、格不一致
① everyone has their homework.
② everyone has his (or her) homework.
四、主句与从句的顺序不当
① some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over, after the nasdaq value dropped by over two thirds.
② after the nasdaq value dropped by over two thirds, some of the new dot-com millionaires found out the party was over.
五、双重否定
① barely no one noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
② barely anyone noticed that the pop star lip-synched during the whole performance.
六、修饰语、插入语的位置不当
① the forest fire, no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, jumped the firebreak.
② no longer held in check by the exhausted firefighters, the forest fire jumped the firebreak.
七、意义含糊的先行词
① the band members collected his and her uniforms.
② the band members collected their uniforms.
八、介词和冠词的滥用
① the project of the government reduces the costs of production of the private firms.
② the government project reduces the production costs of private firms.
九、句子缺少成分
① when aiming for the highest returns, and also thinking about the possible losses.
② when aiming for the highest returns, investors also should think about the possible losses.
十、忘记断句
① i do not recall what kind of printer it was all i remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.
② i do not recall what kind of printer it was. all i remember is that it could sort, staple, and print a packet at the same time.